“Audrey!!! My mother screamed my name as our car swerved to avoid the up-coming truck. I squeezed my eyes shut and started to cry.
“Mommy!!” I screamed holding tight onto the small white teddy my mommy had given me yesterday for my birthday. “Tell daddy stop!” I opened my eyes to see my mother’s frantic eyes and her hands attempting at prying the wheel from my father’s cold hands. It all happened so fast after that. I can still remember the screeching of the car wheels as we swerved off the road and into the trees. Right than was when my mother risked her life to climb into the backseat and cover me with her body, I held onto her tight and told her I loved her over and over. That’s when the car hit the tree; the glass shattered and flew everywhere. I heard my mother gasp and the glass hit her body, i closed my eyes and screamed and screamed. My mother’s body was still over mine, like a miracle my mother had managed to protect me from all of the glass.
“Mommy?” I said shaking her over and over. “Mommy!!” I screamed and she fell onto the car floor and I saw she was the blood everywhere around her, and the lifeless look in her eyes… I cried and cried until I heard the sirens and my father screaming for me and my mother, this was all a play for the ambulance , he had said my mom was driving and wouldn’t stop going so fast and they swerved. He had tried to save me but the car door opened and he had fallen out… Being only 4 at the time I knew my father was evil. The ambulance loaded me and my mommy onto a stretcher and I looked over at her, I could hear them talking saying it was a miracle I survived and how my mommy didn’t make it. Again I cried and cried knowing that after today everything was changed.

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I rolled around in my bed I was having the same nightmare again about the car crash. I grabbed my old tattered sheets and screamed into my pillow. My door was thrown open and hit the wall sending dust and old bugs everywhere into the attic. I opened my eyes and kept my head face down, oh shit. The thin cotton blanket was thrown off of me and my father grabbed my hair pulling my head up. His eyes were blood red, of course he had been drinking, and he smelled of smoke. He kept hold on my hair and pulled harder, I knew not to scream because once I screamed… oh no.
“Shut your god damn mouth! I’m downstairs trying to play poker and all I hear is your fucking mouth!” He slapped me, letting me fall back down on the small mattress that lied on the floor, heaps of dust surrounding it. “If I hear one more god damn sound of you I swear I will… oh Audrey you don’t know what I will do.” He laughed and stalked towards the door. He slammed the door and my walls shook sending even more dust around the air. I knew to be quiet than, when he didn’t tell me what was going to happen that meant he improvised, and that meant hell for me. I wiped the tears from my eyes and held onto my beat up white bear that I managed to hold onto during the crash ten years ago, and looked back on the memories of the years I still had my mom. Her smile that lit the whole world up, she had these long dark curls that surrounded her face with those almond shaped eyes that held sapphire blue eyes. I could feel her warm hugs around me and I could still hear her saying she loved me. I stood back up laying my bear onto my bed and looked around my room. I grabbed the broom that lied against the wall next to my bed, every day I woke up to the grimy bug filled attic that was my room. I opened the blinds to the only window in the small attic letting sunshine fill the room. I started to sweep the dust into a pile and pretended once again that this was all just a nightmare and when I opened my eyes my mom would be right downstairs waiting for me.

What do you think so far! (:
This is the first time i’ve ever written a story and i want some feedback on it so far, im 13 btw.
Also any ideas to spice it up a bit (:
THANKS!

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